First Sentences Are Super Important

I went over how to make an awesome first scene in this Tipster Tuesday post and that got me to thinking about the openings in my WIPs. Your first few sentences need to grab your reader's attention. I'd like to give you guys the first few sentences from my WIPs to see if they're doing their jobs.

BROKEN

"Snow makes toddlers go insane--it's a fact--and my brother is certainly no exception to the rule. And since it's my job to watch his crazy ass, I've gotta stand out in the blistering cold for hours while he covers our yard in snow angels. But with all the things I'm responsible for, I guess this is the least of my worries. It could always be worse."

OPHELIA

"My hands dampen as the bus door springs open. The silvery-haired driver smiles at me as I step aboard. He says something, but I'm too out of it to hear him. Stumbling to the back of the Greyhound, I take a seat and stare out the window at the setting sun. I feel sick to my stomach. I'm a little surprised I haven't thrown up yet."

VENGEFUL DEEP

"Today should be a happy day. A day for giving thanks to the sea for the bounty we've received this year. But we have no thanks to give. Not today. Not as we stand, speechless, around the mangled body of Lundy MacLochlan."

If I had to choose, my favorite would probably be VENGEFUL DEEP and my least favorite would be BROKEN. But that's not to say I don't like the opening for BROKEN...I just think the other two leave the reader with more questions and a stronger sense of foreboding. But I'm the one who wrote these, so my opinions are possibly biased and don't really count.

What I want from you guys is a brutally honest opinion. I need to know if you'd read on based just on the openings. Tell me why they're good, why they're bad, why they work, why they don't, what I did well, and what could be better.

Thanks in advance, everyone!

HAPPY WRITING, LOVELIES!